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there you go
lighting matches in the rain,
walking with two feet
that the gods gave you
because they cannot walk,

heading home as if with news
of some miraculous disaster,

counting the steps between yourself
and the clouds that disappeared
behind the grey veil of October.

thunder and lightning unfold
so close above

and you dream of a destination
somewhere in the south

where birds and stormy weather coexist.

behind you there is nothing,
running water will erase
every footprint you have left
on the dark sand of this metropolis.

before you there is distance,
enough to live your life
in a constant state of travel,

but not nearly enough signs
for you to know
where you are heading.

close your eyes
as not to be blinded
by the red lights and the yellow warnings,
those ever changing speed limits,

and open your arms
as to be looked at by the sun

that will soon peek out behind the nothingness,

ripping the veil
of the vast, unending
cobweb sky.
here's a nice piece.
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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-01-01
Because we need not rush into the new year; on commuting with no hurry by ~chapaV is written with a fondness towards the realization about the distance behind and in front of us. ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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Kuhane-chan Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013
I REMEMBER this one.
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chapaV Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Back in the day, girl!
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013
:worship: Hello! This wonderful piece of yours has been featured here: [link]
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PaniCrusnik09 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
I'm humbled. So eloquent, so precise, so resonant. I adore this piece. My utmost thanks for sharing it with us.
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Violet-Minds Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
fucking brilliant.
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realARTIZT Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this :)
I envy this
But I'm glad you made this :D

" there you go lighting matches in the rain, walking with two feet that the gods gave you because they cannot walk"- perfect lines. Simply beautiful.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
Congrats on the DD! (:
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ocean-whispers Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013   Writer
Beautiful. I really enjoyed:

behind you there is nothing,
running water will erase
every footprint you have left
on the dark sand of this metropolis.


It's an absolutely lovely piece overall.
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EgoSlayer Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
I absolutely love the verse starting with "before you there is distance" and the verse right after it.
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doublethefun Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
beautiful
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Silencelabyrinth Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
Here IS a nice piece. Thank you for it :heart:
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TiaTitan Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely piece, and a well deserved D.D. :)
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RuisuRuisuDance Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congrats on the DD!
Amazing, good job ^^
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Claryns Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
solid man nice very nice man
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :heart:
Have a nice day and Happy New Year! :holly:
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Jc428 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Usually I don't really understand poems or atleast never get inspired by them. This time I did, maybe the first time ever. Thank you for that. I might start reading poems. Maybe write some of my own too.
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013   Writer
:+fav: This is a very nice piece, as you say. I appreciate the color, the atmospheres presented in past, present and future. Thank you. Congrats on the DD!
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
I was immediately swept up into the commute your piece describes as if I'm racing along to see where this person things he or she is going lol.. I love it, and it's an instant fave for me ---

congratulations!
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
correction: THINKS

I was whisked along in the poem like I said that I typed my comment with the same amount of speed -- fingers going much faster than meant to go! :typerhappy:
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
Strong work to show. Congratulations on your D.D!
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j-devine Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2010
This is probably the best poem I've ever read on this website, no lie. The imagery is amazing. :)
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chapaV Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2010  Professional Writer
wow, im glad you liked it. im not sure if i can keep up the quality though, this poem was a product of a really cool moment i had last year, wrote it on the street.
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j-devine Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2010
[link]

You might find that video interesting. And as far as keeping up the quality goes, if you did it once you can do it again, you just have to wait until the right poem finds you :)
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